1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
The actual fundrasier how it went because to me that was the most heart warming part.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Yes it is a story that makes you want more as it develops!
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes. When the dad first found out about Tucker.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
Less of the camping trip more of the fundraiser
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