1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
Although the main focus is not on what your mom's company does it would be cool to know what products are being bought and sold down there!
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
The story is very captivating!
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Story needs more detail. From the different countries to why they are moving all the time.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
I would really like to hear more about the main cultural differences.
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